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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: spartan 342 bio Thu Nov 25, 2010 12:26 pm | |
| Name:mark
Service Tag:342
Age:30
Gender: male
Height: 8 feet
Colour: black
Personality: Quiet
Level/Rank:recruit
Background:found shooting a squad of grunts in new mombasa by buck. surprised that i could kill hey took me and said "come youll be a great odst." so buck trained him to be an odst but as halsey was watching him she realised he was too good to be an odst. so she made him a spartan.
Skill Assessment: good pilot can shoot a grunt 200 yds away with a pistol
Sample Post: as 342 ran through the streets of new mombasa memories flooded his mind. his parents his brothers. all gone. he ran through an alley and found more brutes. jumping he stuck them with a spike grenade. as they fell rage filled him and he blasted there dead body. "why" he said "why did they have to kill them?" he moved on and as he found more covenant he completly annahlated them. as he borded the pelican back to base he was glad he was leaving this wrecthed place.
OOC:i dont know how to spell analilated or wrecthed so if there right or wrong i dont know
Last edited by tnoy23 on Fri Dec 03, 2010 6:40 pm; edited 3 times in total | |
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Arogorn2130 Private
Posts : 46 Credits : 50 Join date : 2010-11-20 Age : 27 Location : On Reach fighting for my life killing thousands apon thousands of Elites
Bio Armor: Spartan - Mark V Weapon: UNSC - Assualt Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Wed Dec 01, 2010 5:59 pm | |
| i know im not an admin but try to spell correctly like hey needs to be changed to he and also i want to put this out there only a spartan 2 or Doctor Halsley can make spartans and a spartan 2 makes spartan 3's also look at mine add more detail to it make it a little more exciting
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Arogorn2130 Private
Posts : 46 Credits : 50 Join date : 2010-11-20 Age : 27 Location : On Reach fighting for my life killing thousands apon thousands of Elites
Bio Armor: Spartan - Mark V Weapon: UNSC - Assualt Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Thu Dec 02, 2010 5:30 pm | |
| and once you fix all of that i would say approved but thats just me | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Thu Dec 02, 2010 10:56 pm | |
| wow dude u got me ecited thinking it was finnaly accepted but all i got was an idiot critizing me about SPELLING??? is spelling a requirement in the template? no. so focus on your own crap and not other peoples | |
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Arogorn2130 Private
Posts : 46 Credits : 50 Join date : 2010-11-20 Age : 27 Location : On Reach fighting for my life killing thousands apon thousands of Elites
Bio Armor: Spartan - Mark V Weapon: UNSC - Assualt Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Fri Dec 03, 2010 7:47 am | |
| well i would approve it but you havent fixed it yet | |
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Horbur Admin
Posts : 96 Credits : 151 Join date : 2009-08-17 Location : Riding a banshee shooting down spartans
Bio Armor: Covenant - Councilor Weapon: Covenant - Energy Sword Enemy: UNSC
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Fri Dec 03, 2010 3:46 pm | |
| tnoy, he's right. It may not be a necessity, but it would be really great if you tried. Add more detail, and fix a bit of the spelling and It'll be approved | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Fri Dec 03, 2010 6:30 pm | |
| k i just dont like being told that by some1 whos not an admin so i would appreciate it if he wouldnt do that next time | |
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DominionGeneral Private
Posts : 27 Credits : 41 Join date : 2010-12-02 Age : 26 Location : Mississippi
Bio Armor: Spartan - ODST Weapon: UNSC - Battle Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Fri Dec 03, 2010 6:55 pm | |
| He's just trying to help.You don't have to be an admin to give advice. | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Fri Dec 03, 2010 7:34 pm | |
| ugh. I KNOW THAT DOESNT MEAN I LIKE IT. | |
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azureskys Corporal
Posts : 66 Credits : 71 Join date : 2010-10-23
Bio Armor: Weapon: Covenant - Energy Sword Enemy: UNSC
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Sun Dec 05, 2010 3:50 am | |
| Not trying to be offensive or anything but the net is already filled with enough idiots who can't spell or use grammar correctly please don't add to their ranks. Correct spelling and grammar would be nice because it would allow other people to actually understand what you are writing not to mention make you look more professional. So why don't you take a poke around at other peoples' bios and add to yours. Also, don't be angry about people giving you advice. Arogorn did it in a nice enough manner so you shouldn't feel offended. Giving advice is just like teaching. If your teacher corrected you on a maths question you did wrong would you lash out at them and tell them not to criticize you? If Arogorn said something like: "Oh my god you idiot! Learn how to spell you freaking ten-year-old." Then it would be totally justifiable to get angry but he didn't so cool down a little bit. Sorry for the long lecture lol. | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Sun Dec 05, 2010 12:03 pm | |
| ugh. i try to spell right on these types of games but sometimes instead of you i put u out of habit.i know he was trying to be nice but that doesnt mean i take it as nice and can you guys plz stop posting whenever i see that theres a new post i get exited thinking it was approved but not so i get really fustrated and annoyed | |
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Arogorn2130 Private
Posts : 46 Credits : 50 Join date : 2010-11-20 Age : 27 Location : On Reach fighting for my life killing thousands apon thousands of Elites
Bio Armor: Spartan - Mark V Weapon: UNSC - Assualt Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:51 pm | |
| uhhhhh he already approved it | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Sun Dec 05, 2010 10:37 pm | |
| technicley he didnt he said add more detail and fix spelling then itll b approved but im prety sure he still has to look at it and make sure its good that way so no its not and still plz stop posting till he approves it soi wont get really fustrated and disappointed like i did when i saw u posted | |
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azureskys Corporal
Posts : 66 Credits : 71 Join date : 2010-10-23
Bio Armor: Weapon: Covenant - Energy Sword Enemy: UNSC
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Sun Dec 05, 2010 10:47 pm | |
| I'm actually a mod so I can approve bios... I'm on everyday so hurry up and improve it. | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Mon Dec 06, 2010 10:14 am | |
| i DID improve it before it was like 2 sentences total and, no offense, but i dont belive ur a mod but thats just me | |
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Horbur Admin
Posts : 96 Credits : 151 Join date : 2009-08-17 Location : Riding a banshee shooting down spartans
Bio Armor: Covenant - Councilor Weapon: Covenant - Energy Sword Enemy: UNSC
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Mon Dec 06, 2010 3:47 pm | |
| He's a mod. Blue colour = mod. Turquoise = Admin. | |
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Arogorn2130 Private
Posts : 46 Credits : 50 Join date : 2010-11-20 Age : 27 Location : On Reach fighting for my life killing thousands apon thousands of Elites
Bio Armor: Spartan - Mark V Weapon: UNSC - Assualt Rifle Enemy: Covenant
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Mon Dec 06, 2010 5:40 pm | |
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tnoy23 Private
Posts : 43 Credits : 46 Join date : 2010-11-25
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Mon Dec 06, 2010 9:06 pm | |
| oh ok thanks horbur but is it good or do i need to add more detail cuz i already strained my mind thinking of that (i dont have a very large imagination XD) | |
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azureskys Corporal
Posts : 66 Credits : 71 Join date : 2010-10-23
Bio Armor: Weapon: Covenant - Energy Sword Enemy: UNSC
| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Mon Dec 06, 2010 10:48 pm | |
| Ok your post is longer and you fixed some of your spelling. If you can't spell something then this forum does have like spell checking so if something is underlined in red right click it and select the right spelling. Annihilate is spelt like this and this is wretched. If you want to expand your knowledge and writing skill I would suggest reading books. Look at the posts of others too. So for now I declare this bio... APPROVED | |
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tnoy23 Private
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| Subject: Re: spartan 342 bio Tue Dec 07, 2010 7:28 pm | |
| thx and i do read books that doesnt mean im a good speller XD | |
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